My very own isekai light novel called ''Reincarnated in a World ruled by Demons''

How do you like the novel I created?

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Ballel

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Monkey D Theories said:
Okay this might just be me being a snob so don't take my opinion too seriously

But I feel like this is a thing that a lot of anime fans do and I think that your story might stand out a lot more if the characters were truer to yourself.
Like if you are german, this story is primarily written in german, and you are publishing it on a german site, I feel like it would make more sense if the characters were german.
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I could actually see this story being more popular with German names because, as I said in my previous post, Japanese manga/anime authors like to use German names and (simplified / stereotypical versions of) German culture in their stories.
 
BornInAbyss

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Btw I changed the Story Name into Reincarnated in a World ruled by Demons, since its more fitting with the theme of the story itself than the previous title-
 
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BornInAbyss

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solis said:
The new title is better IMO, the previous one was a bit too long and hard to remember.
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Yeah, I needed a title that is basically the story itself. It just fits much better like this.
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I paid an artist to draw me a cover of my webnovel. It will be finished in few days. I can't wait for the result and share it with you guys. :)
 
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Ballel

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Worona Woro said:
I know but he keeps growing in decision making and his impulsiveness gets less and less. :P
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I wanted to write more but I forgot most of it because Ukraine shit.
Sorry

But if you upload any new.chapters, I'll keep reading. Even if isekai is not usually my genre, but I enjoyed reading you story.
 
BornInAbyss

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solis said:
I read the new chapters.
It's just painful to read about world war and shit RN :catcry:
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I thought it'd be kinda fun to describe the current reality in my story even though there are demons and shit hahaha.

Are you reading the german or english version? If english, is it translated correctly or are there some errors?

How do you think of the story line so far? I am reaching currently a wall and need a breakthrough.
 
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Ballel

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BornInAbyss said:
I thought it'd be kinda fun to describe the current reality in my story even though there are demons and shit hahaha.

Are you reading the german or english version? If english, is it translated correctly or are there some errors?

How do you think of the story line so far? I am reaching currently a wall and need a breakthrough.
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I'm reading in English.

Well, I think the part where they gathered allies is waaaay to short.
It took them how long, ¿one chapter? to convince an entire kingdom to join their alliance. And on top of it all, the king allows them to live in his luxurious mansion.
He just believes them ? He is not questioning their intentions?

This smells like PiS and plot armour to me. The MCs generally have a high amount of plot armour.

Then you know, I'm not reading many novels these days and I don't remember ever finishing something from the isekai genre.
I don't really have much content I can compare your work to.
So you might do.best not placing to much importance in what I say. At the end of the day, it's only my personal opinion.

About the English: I'm not a native speaker. I make mistakes, too.
I don't remember where exactly, but you had some 'false friends' in there. Maybe double-check the translations, not just word for word.
 
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