I mean I am focusing on comedy but sure you can give me honest feedback.
Preferably in the comment section of the video lol
I'm not commenting on the video.
Some quick feedback:
—You need better quality of both video and audio. Right now it is unbearable to follow.
—You're clearly overacting since you aren't comfortable with recording. It's okay, most amateurs make this mistake: too much body movement (can't keep your own position regarding the camera), unnatural kinesics, etc. Don't overdo it and your true personality will flow naturally once you take more practice.
—Poor usage of paralanguage. At times your volume goes so low it can't be heard, and while you put some effort, your intonation is overall plane (so you sound boring). You also need to improve fluency. I assume English isn't your mother-tongue so I won't touch that.
—Background music is annoying and makes it difficult to hear you talk.
—Annoying edition of the pictures. Don't need to stretch, rotate, etc. them while they're shown, that actually makes it more difficult to process them.
That's pretty much all I can think of right now.